User blog comment:TMarioD/Arrested-Loud (New Version, ignore the old one)/@comment-26253276-20170223053601

I have a few ideas to renovate. Otherwise, nice story.

PUNCTUAT!ON - You lack all terminal punctuation.

BOLD AND ITALIACS - Helps distinguish lines from character names.

My "The End" Story Sign - Nice and large, this helps clearly mark the end.

Reduced paragraph breaks - Reduces scroll zone and increases lines per screen, allowing one to read the story easier.

Would you like me to copy the script and rewrite for you?