Thread:Thomperfan/@comment-32807753-20180130225024/@comment-32807753-20180130234122

I’m kind of mixed on it. The first time I read the whole thing, I thought there were some good things and some bad things.

I liked the concept overall. Leni questioning Lori as her roommate and getting mad at her for her previous actions is a decent idea for a fanfiction. I also liked how Lori isn’t portrayed as a mean, bully sister, especially for the time it was written back then. She actually seems genuinely trying to make up to Leni for her previous actions here, and I love it. The ending gag with Leni commenting Lori’s weight was pretty funny I’ll admit. I also like the callback to Lori’s malicious actions in Driving Miss Hazy.

My biggest problem is Leni. While I don’t mind her getting mad from time to time, I think they went a little bit too far. She’s so mean to Lori out of nowhere and continuously does it despite all of these nice things she’s doing for her. I’d expect this kind of attitude from Lola (maybe) but Leni? It just seems kind of wrong for her to be this mad at Lori and for this long, especially out of nowhere with no buildup and little explanation to it. The ending twist with Leni’s reasoning also feels like a slap-in-the-face to what could’ve been a heartwarming, interesting ending, and it just makes all of Leni’s actions from before seem more petty and worse. She doesn’t even feel sorry in the end. Also, Leni’s not the kind of person who would slap Lincoln, at least not without apologizing. I just can’t see that happening.

Then again, I haven’t read for a long time because it left a bitter taste in my mouth, so who knows.

I just wanted to ask you how you would react to it since it features Leni as the antagonist. Any further thoughts?