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Judgement feedback

Chapter 1 - quite mysterious. Lincoln seems to have an annound guardian. However the unknown person seems to be a threat himself. Hard to blame Linc for being afraid of a protector with a terrifying look. Lincoln has some skills in making ripostes to those who insult him

Chapter 2 - Haiku's poem is quite nihilistic and thrilling as it should be. Nice action scene of fight between Delta and the wolves. Even adults can hardly fight one wolf. Delta is a selfless badass. I like him already.

Before Delta befriends Linc's sisters, I'd like to see how he befriends Lincoln.

Chapter 3/4 - It's nice to see Lincoln is concerned about Lucy and her safety.

The fanfic is getting more and more interesting.

Links to all my fanfics are on my profile page in a table, there is also a short description of each of them. http://theloudhouse.wikia.com/wiki/User:FirstDrellSpectre  You can read them if you wish and please leave comment if you read them.