Thread:Weavillain/@comment-30498740-20180501012410

=Two Holes, One Stroke= Lori always had to deal with problems, but never expected one to be this bad. For a few years now, she participated in an annual golf tournament in Royal Woods, but always lost. ‘I can still remember those losses, even now’ Lori thought sadly. As a glum expression came across her face, her mind took her back to the past.

''Lori was 14 and this was the first time she was participating in the golf tournament. Since she had some experience in golfing before this she thought she could win easily. But unfortunately it didn’t happen. She was about to win when she hit the golf ball, but instead of heading towards its correct destination it landed in the pond. If she made the shot she would have won the tournament. Next year came and she lost again. This time due to her hitting the golf ball and it landing in the sand ditch. Lori still had some optimism she might win, but that diminished the next year. Lori was playing it carful this time and was on the last hole and when she hit the golf ball, she heard it hit something. Jumping with joy she thought she finally won, but noticed her right hand was no longer holding onto something and saw that her club was nowhere near her. She checked the scoreboard to see that her winning shot didn’t happen as someone else won. Lori thought, ‘Where’s my club then and what did it hit?’ Her eyes brought her to a sight of a man laying down in pain with a club laying near him and a golf ball. ‘That’s my “winning stroke” went’, she thought awkwardly. “Sorry about that!” Lori said, and then hung her head in shame.''

'''This is all I got so far. Would you mind giving some advice on this? I kind of been just trying to add more prose into it, but it really isn't working that well since it's kind of making me doubt myself and not enjoy making this, but I thought prose would make a story good and without that it sucks.''' 