User blog comment:AndrewBrauer/Whipped - Alternate Version/@comment-32055298-20170705024758

Once again your missing the core issue of your story really of demonizing the sisters for no reason other the 2 of your favorites. You gave little reason for them to treat Lincoln that way frankly, provide better motivation, if you stick with your orginal motives of the sisters the. Don't write them so cruel, the blackmail stuff wasn't needed. You could slowly have some of the sisters sympathize with Lincoln slowly as some don't. Also the tape recorder was convenient excuse just to get everybody in trouble frankly.