Thread:MrTyeDye/@comment-30953185-20171102043152/@comment-32202721-20171102112111

S'alright. It's paced pretty well for a horror story; you seem to have a grasp on the concept of starting out normal and gradually introducing the unsettling elements in. I would have liked you to describe their demonic forms in more detail, though.

Also, maybe this is just personal preference, but I kind of wish you wouldn't ship yourself with Leni. I get you have a crush on her, but it's already established in canon that she's into Chaz. Plus, it makes the whole thing come off as personal wish fulfillment, something for yourself instead of for your readers, y'know?