User blog comment:TheMaximumMatt/Making the Case Re-written/@comment-26253276-20180306182232

Good, but the sisters endure too much unnecessarily. Luna's mishap should not have been a push factor for Sam to leave her. It was an accident, and she did not know it would happen. Likewise, Lynn did not see the rake and should not have been punished whatsoever. Because of these reasons, I prefer AndrewBrauer's rewrite on Making the Case.