User blog comment:Lucasthewikiguy13/Lucas's FanFiction Reviews 7: No Such Love (Parts 1 and 2)/@comment-32055298-20170716034953/@comment-30592229-20170717065635

Sure, but in stories like these, your story can't just have one twist, turn, or attention grabber, what if the only hook here was Lori trying to kill Lincoln, well considering it was practically resolved in the chapter it debuted in, in a story that will most likely have a lot of parts, the story would become dull by part 4 or 5, and wouldn't be as good at what the story is doing. It needs a substantial amount of unexpected moments to keep readers ommersed in the story, however I'm willing to respect opinions here.

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