Thread:IronRaphRa/@comment-30498740-20180520221827

'''Please read this before you read the story, it’s actually important. If you’re wondering why this story isn’t written like the NSL one, I actually felt when I made the original script for this story I was just trying too hard to impress everyone and trying to add so much prose even though I didn’t like it since I’m not the biggest fan of prose. Eventually I decided I wanted to make this my way, not following others, but following what I wanted to do. I always wanted to do things with fun and the original script wasn’t fun and I wasn’t really happy with it. So I scrapped it, this story took a long time to make, but I did put in all I could to do this. I just wanted to have fun while writing this while putting my own ideas in this. Granted, I don’t expect this to that good to others so sorry it isn’t good to you guys. Then again that’s just my self-confidence punching itself repeatedly while on a tightrope that’s lit on fire over the Grand Canyon. My self-confidence hates me, here’s the story. '''

Two Holes, One Stroke 

[Lori sat on her bed with a sad expression over her face with a flier for the Royal Woods golf tournament in her hand.]

Lori (sad): Another year to win this, yet I’m literally going to lose this again. Why did I pick this up? I still remembered the first time I’ve entered the tournament.

''[We cut to a fifteen year old Lori with her golf attire on a golf course with a confident smirk on her face. She was at the last hole in the course. All she needed to do was the hit the golf ball into the hole and she would beat her opponent. Confident she would win; she hit the golf ball with her club. She saw it in the sky heading towards its destination, but then took a sudden turn towards the pond and landed there.]''

''Lori (confused): What? ''

''Referee: (hands the trophy to Rob) Uh, tough luck kid. ''

''Rob (ecstatically):  Yes, I finally accomplished something in my life! (pumps his fist in the air)''

[Lori sighs.]

Lori (annoyed): Then there was last year! That was a total disaster!

[We cut now to a sixteen year old Lori on a golf course at the last hole.]

''Lori (in her mind): (hits the golf ball with her club) This time, I literally will win. I’ll finally have my first trophy! ''

''[Lori hears the golf ball hit something and jumps in joy, but realizes that her right hand is no longer holding onto her club. She looks to see the scorecard and that someone else won.]''

''Lori (shocked): Then what did my golf ball hit then? And where’s my golf club? (looks around)''

[Lori spots a man lying down in the ground groaning in pain and spots her missing items near him.]

''Lori: Sorry! ''

Referee (deadpan): Fore, would have worked better.

''Lori (mad): Who asked you? (points her finger at him)''

''Referee: Nobody. (walks away from Lori)''

[The crowd starts to laugh at Lori and she begins to feel embarrassed and runs away.]

Lori (sad): I’m never going to live that down. (Sighs) Maybe I could just give this another shot?

[Lori notices the flier says about having a partner and that it’s optional. Lori starts to ponder about it while walking back and forth in her room.]

Lori: A partner? I could have one and that way I would have a better way to win. (opens the door to leave)

[Lynn sees Lori come outside of her room and goes up to her.]

Lynn: Hey Lori.

Lori: (brushes Lynn to the side) Not now Lynn, I need a partner!

Lynn (disappointed): Oh, okay.

Lori (in her mind): Now who would be the perfect partner for the golf tournament? Someone I can depend on and can play the sport well. (stops in her tracks)Who did I just bump into? (turns around to see Lynn walking away back to her own room) Lynn! Perfect, she’s the master of sports!

Lori: Lynn, wait! (runs up to her)

Lynn: What is it?

Lori: How would you like to be my partner for the upcoming golf tournament?

Lynn: (smiles) I would be glad to. (her expression falters) But I’m not good at golf and I don’t know anything about it.

[Lori gets a shocked expression on her face.]

Lori (confused): You don’t know golf? How? Aren’t you the queen of sports?

Lynn: Even the queen of sports has her limitations. (shrugs)

Lori (in her mind): Lynn doesn’t know golf. I’m doomed, unless I can teach her the game, but I’ll have to do it fast since the game is coming up in three days. (starts to ponder what to do with a worried expression.

Lynn: (notices Lori’s worried expression) You could train me, you know. I’m a fast learner when it comes to sports. (points at herself)

Lori: (ponders about it) Okay, wait for an hour and I’ll train you. (goes back to her room)

Lynn: Okay.

[Cut to Lynn in her golf outfit waiting outside in the front yard for Lori. Golf equipment scattered around the front yard. ]

Lynn (in her mind): This is starting to get boring. (looks back at the house with her expressions changing from bored to sad) Why did I have to lie to Lori? If she finds out, I’m doomed. (starts to fidget a little) No, no I have to keep this act up until we win the tournament, maybe then with her trophy she won’t be that mad at me when I tell her the truth. (stops fidgeting)

[Lori comes out of the house with a packet in her hand.]

Lynn (in her mind): Lori came! Finally! (notices the packet in Lori’s hand) Why does she have a packet?

Lori: Here. (hands the packet to Lynn)

[Lynn hesitates and keeps staring at the packet. Lori starts to get annoyed by Lynn not taking the packet.]

Lori (annoyed): Here! (shoves the packet into Lynn’s hands) This packet goes over everything you need to know for the golf tournament. Try to finish it 2 days. (pats Lynn’s shoulder) Okay?

Lynn: Yeah, okay.

Lori: Thank you, you’re a life saver! (removes her hand from Lynn’s shoulder) This is going to be great! (leaves back to the house)

Lynn (disappointed): Yeah, great. (looks down in sadness)

[Cuts to Lori in her room.]

Lori: Hopefully Lynn reads the packet. (laughs) What am I saying? It’s Lynn; she’ll do anything sports related.

[Cue to the next day.]

[Lynn found Lori sitting on the couch with her phone.]

Lynn: Lori! I have a question on the…

Lori: (rolls her eyes) Lynn you don’t have to ask me anything as I gave you the packet. Just read it. (continues to look at her phone)

Lynn: Yeah, but it would better if we sp… I mean asking you would be good though. (darts her eyes away)

[Lori’s phone rings.]

Lori: It’s Bobby! (gets off the couch)

Lynn: Wait, Lori!

Lori: You’ll be fine. Just go read the packet. (goes up the stairs)

[Lynn sighs.]

[Cue to the next day.]

[Lori goes outside and is surprised when she sees Lynn with golf clubs and a weird miniature golf course.]

Lori: What is this? (pointing to the golf course)

Lynn: (smiles) It’s a handmade golf course, I had Lana help me with it.

Lori: This is perfect.

Lynn:  Yeah, now w..

Lori: Now you can practice golf by yourself. (looks to Lynn) This is a smart plan. Now we can crush the competition there and win!

[Lynn’s smile turns into a frown, but Lori doesn’t seem to notice. Lori leaves to Vanzilla leaving Lynn alone.]

[The day of the tournament finally came with the birds chirping in the morning. We cut to Lori in her bed with her golf equipment right beside her bed.]

Lori: (wakes up and yawns) Today’s the day! (gets out of bed and takes her golf equipment with her)

[Lori goes into Lynn’s room and sees Lynn sleeping. The bed next to Lynn’s was empty since Lucy left to Haiku’s house.]

Lori: (uses a blow horn) Wake up Lynn!

[Lynn wakes up startled.]

Lynn: Lori! (puts her hands in the air) What was that for?

Lori: To get you up. Come on, we have to get ready for today.

Lynn: (rolls her eyes) Fine. (gets out of her bed)

Lori: I’m going to give you a little quiz to see if you read the packet. What’s a birdie?

Lynn: A score of one less than par.

Lori: Correct! What’s a duff?

Lynn: A bad shot.

Lori: (ponders for a while) Ooh, I bet you won’t be able to solve this one. What is the maximum number of clubs you are allowed to carry in your golf bag?

Lynn: 14.

[Lori gets a shocked expression, but it quickly turns to suspicion.]

Lori (suspiciously): You know for a person who said they didn’t know golf, you awfully know a lot.

Lynn: (smiles smugly) I told you, I’m a fast learner.

Lori (suspiciously): The last question though wasn’t from the book.

Lynn: (nervous) I-it wasn’t? (smiles awkwardly) I also kind of… mas- I mean searched it online so I could have more knowledge.

Lori: Okay, I guess. (shakes her head) I’ll wait in the car for you, get ready. Also you don’t need to bring anything, but yourself you can use my golf equipment. (leaves the room)

[Lynn sighs in relief.]

[Cut to Lynn getting into Vanzilla with Lori at the wheel.]

'''So what do you think so far? This is halfway done so far.''' 