Thread:Dragonzako/@comment-33694397-20180513211531/@comment-33694397-20180513222803

IRR: That's true, I guess I underestimated Luan. Well, let's continue.

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(Luan laughs once more, Lincoln, angered, leaves; In the ducts, Lincoln is still reading, El Diablo then slither in the ducts. All of Lana's pets then infested the ducts, causing him to fall out of the vent and run to his room)

LINCOLN: (enraged) That's it! - Lincoln said

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IRR: And once again, Lincoln is losing his temper too easily. Story or script format - pick one and stick with it! All this is doing is making it look like the characters are narrating their own lives.