User blog comment:Harburton81/Fanfiction - March It Off/@comment-32230637-20180318225636

I will say this.. This is very wonderful.. I have spotted some typing mistakes you made.. first of all.. 'LUNA: Hey, champ. How you feeling? LINCOLN: I'm feeling unhappy, Lynn. Considering that we don't got a marching band for the big football game.' When he should say 'I'm feeling unhappy, Luna' and lastly 'LINCOLN: Our course, coach. They're perfect for the roles. I hioe' And again it should be.. 'LINCOLN: Of course, coach. They're perfect for the roles. I hope.' just wanting to get that out of the way.. Other than that my favorite moment is the Nightmare scene and yeah that's about it.. I think you should be a LH writer.. I'll give it a 8.9/10.