User blog comment:Wiz4501/Music Star Lincoln/@comment-31489652-20170311022925/@comment-29928741-20170609191048

Dude, your fanfic has a lot of problems! First of all, why would Lincoln randomly decide to be a composer just for listening to Luna's song? I mean, what the heck? He listened to her music a lot of times and I never see him randomly want to be a composer. Second, how the heck did he meet Jay Rock? Come on, you have to at least give an explanation, like maybe make Luna introduce to him or something! And third, is Lincoln randomly telling Lynn Sr. and the sisters to leave!? WHAT!? Oh, and also... The plot is kinda dumb. If I were you, I would write it like something (not Luna's stupid music), Lincoln tries to play, blah blah blah, make a sudden rival appear, blah blah blah, and all of that, you know something like Harburton81's "Musical Madness", but nope! I get this! What the heck!? Also, judging by your awful drawing and spelling, I assume you are underaged. Like I don't know, probably 4 years old. You know underaged people like you shouldn't be here. And one more thing, If I were to give this a rating, I'll give this a 0 out of 10.