Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-26330630-20170103063836/@comment-26330630-20170103152738

Jebarul wrote: What's wrong with it?

Here is the correct way that the examples I used should be written. I will have explanations with every single correction: '''The term " she is unstoppable at pranking" is not grammatically correct and sounds very awkward. I fixed up the wording a little and it sounds a lot smoother.''' "The sentence "She is very optimistic" is not needed because the first sentence already states that she is positive and cheerful. The last sentence was not structured correctly and the use of "especially" was incorrect in this situation. The second sentence was unnecessary information/a run on sentence. If the second bit of information is 'really' necessary, it would fit in better under the "Costumes" section of her page. The word "however" 'always' needs to have a semicolon behind it; this one only had a comma before I fixed it. The first sentence was worded awkwardly, so I fixed it to make it flow better. Technically I don't think it was grammatically incorrect, but it wasn't the best way to word this particle sentence. It's unnecessary to put names in parenthesis. It's easier to just link the character whose name was parenthesized. Once again there is no need to put the characters name in parenthesis. It is excess information. Instead of using parenthesis you can just link the character to who they're played by. Also the term "interprets" was used incorrectly here, so I changed it to something that is grammatically correct.'''
 * Though Luan is typically one of the kinder siblings, she is unstoppable when it comes to pulling pranks.
 * She is always positive and cheerful. She is very supportive towards her siblings and loves to make them laugh and feel better.
 * In Hand-Me-Downer it's revealed that she has been wearing her braces from a younger age.
 * However; he is rude to Lincoln, mocking him when Luke uses him to clean the toilet, when Leon bites his thumb instead of kissing it, and when they tease him about Ronnie Anne.
 * In the mini-comic 'Deuces Wild!', Luan takes on the super heroine identity "The Joker", one of Ace Savvy's sidekicks. Her powers are not shown, as she's only seen mocking the gas monster. In the comic, she is summoned by Savvy alongside the rest of Savvy's deck to help him and One-Eyed Jack defeat the gas monster.

Feel free to compare and contrast the original examples I used and the versions where I fixed them. I think I explained everything as well as I could, but if you still have questions, I'd be happy to further explain my reasoning.