Thread:Thomperfan/@comment-32318818-20180320205824/@comment-32318818-20180430015634

Okay, so, about your version of Fool Me Twice, It was... Okay, I found the scene with Lynn beating you up under suspicion of being Luan to be a bit unnecessary. The part where Luna said you had no taste in music kinda bugged me, but I guess everyone was being a little selfish in that scene, weren't they? The only other thing that bugged me was when Lynn Sr called you "kid." If he considers you to be part of the family, then that's not really appropriate, "kiddo," or "Nolan," or even "son" would be more appropriate. Other than that, this was decent.