Thread:Dragonzako/@comment-33694397-20180513211531/@comment-33694397-20180515013728

IRR: I'm having fun too, and I do think more people would help. But my main problem is this fanfic; it feels like it's worse than the last time I saw it.

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LOLA: (to the viewers) I learn from my siblings that past regressions can harm you in the present. I took my frustration on Lincoln and I got my comeuppance. I learn that I can be ignored by my siblings to teach myself a lesson. At the end, we make amends.

(Lola pulls out a can spray paint, Lincoln glares)

LINCOLN: What are you up to? - Lincoln ask

(Lola runs to the front of the tree house and spray paint something, she finished and it says "The Louds Tree House". Lincoln was teary eyed and hugs Lola again)

LINCOLN: Thank you. - Lincoln said thoughtfully

LOLA: You welcome. - Lola said

(The eleven group hugged each other and they glance at their tree house and they walk in it, Lola pops up and wink to the viewers as she went into their tree house, too.)

THE END

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IRR: And now for my final thoughts. This fanfic was a chore to get through: the format that didn't know whether it wanted to be script or story format, grammar problems, too many plotlines, character butchering, and using this as an excuse to complain about an episode the author didn't like. The only question I have is whose character got butchered the most; Lola who was turned into a generic evil brat, or Lincoln who was turned into a crybaby.

Thanks for doing this with me Dragonzako.