User blog comment:Thunderbird1InternationalRescue/A Brother Gone Missing/@comment-26302585-20170227031244

This is great so far.

I think Lori should be more concerned about Lincoln than her relationship with Bobby.

There's one thing that doesn't make sense though. Lana went to Lincoln's room to check on him acting as though she didn't know he ran away. But Lincoln did tell her he was running away the previous night and she promised not tell anyone. Then she later tells everyone what Lincoln told her. No offense, but you need to pay attention to continuity in your story. Unless that was supposed to be Lola checking on Lincoln.