User blog comment:YoshiRocker13/The Re-Write Fanfics/@comment-5366328-20161230090314

I think Come Sale Away needs a rewrite here is my take.

Everything remains the same up until the part where Lincoln starts worrying about his game.

Instead of stealing and selling he decides to sell his own material, he starts off by selling some of his action figures.

Then sees that he is in middle place, next he decides to sell some of his comics one by one, only for him to realize that he can't give them all up.

Fearing a decline he asks a little girl if she would want anything, she wants a toy which Lincoln decides is Bun-Bun he has some regret and remembers his time with Bun-Bun, but because he is so close to the lead he sells her Bun-Bun. Lincoln to wins, and he decides to dance but just can't because it isn't good because he just can't enjoy it with Bun-Bun with someone else.

So the other sisters decide to the girl money she doesn't want it only Bun-Bun, then they decide to buy toys for her and she is still not wanting them.

Because they didn't make that much money they decide to chip in and buy her just a Doll set, the girl takes it and gives back Bun-Bun.

Lincoln reunites with Bun-Bun and thankful he gives his sisters the money he made. He might have lost both his money and given some comics away but he is happy to have Bun-Bun back and was touched by his sisters for their co operation.

Might be cheesy but I think that would have worked much better than what Come Sale Away was at the end. Also the parts wouldn't be in my part either. Feel free to use this version if you want.