User blog comment:FirstDrellSpectre/Fanfiction - One of the Teens/@comment-36632165-20180915200558

im gonna give you some advice to make your fanfics better.if you dont take it,oh well.

1.Try to make what the loud siblings are saying more in-character.Hey, that's what makes them so unique, right?

2.Make your stories more realistic.if the loud house was a fantasy,i wouldnt complain.but like in your fanfic lost on the open ocean,if they were in the middleof the ocean they would most likely die.and not drink their tears.

anyway, you probably wont read this and thats fine so bye.