Thread:Thomperfan/@comment-31231137-20180901194442

Hi Nolan. I just wanted to give you some advice about your fanfictions. I personally think they're alright, but there is something I want to request you do to potentially improve them.

So, I want to talk about your relationship with Leni in the fanfics. Before you take what I'm about to say out of context, I want to clarify that I love watching/reading about a happy couple. However, I feel like your relationship with Leni is a little TOO happy. What I mean is that there is rarely ever and conflict between the two regarding anything. Or maybe there is and I'm just missing something; I admittedly haven't read all your fanfics. Still, I think that adding a conflict between yourself and Leni would make their relationship more interesting. For example, maybe in a story, you and Leni find out that there is little you two have in common, and wonder if your relationship will work out. Just an idea.

Also, your rewrites. I'm not sure if you've heard this before, but you just seem to shoehorn yourself into these episodes most of the time. Maybe try and come up with different versions of the episode rather than just the episode proper, only with you in it. Unfortunately, that seems to be the case for most of your rewrites. It doesn't create anything bad, per se, but it does feel kind of pointless since I could basically watch the episode proper and find nothing different from your rewrite. Again, I don't think you're rewrites are bad, but maybe try changing the stories a little bit, and not just by adding an extra scene or two of you. Like what you did with No Such Luck, and you're rewrite of that episode was great. I know you hated that episode proper, though, but still, you should try doing this to episodes you like.

So, that's my advice for your fanfics, Nolan. I am not trying to bash them in any way, but rather telling you how you could improve them to make them better. Hopefully, you will at least consider what I have said. But, I'll leave it to you to decide if I make any valid suggestions. Thank you, and take care. Bye. 