User blog:AustinDR/No Such Love (Review)

So, after reading the Engineer's comment about a certain AU fanfic based on NSL, I decided to see what the fuss was all about. After reading some parts of the first two chapters over on FF.net...wow. I thought my story was bad. With no disrespect for the author, this was probably one of the worst stories I have read thus far. So, after Lincoln gets disowned by his family, he accidentally gets red paint all over his clothes, and this eventually makes his family infer tha the must be dead. So, the parents are arrested because a neighbor informed the police about them leaving their son outside, and the girls are taken into foster care. So, that's all fine and good. Lincoln goes to spend some time with Clyde, Luna somehow ends up being left behind, and Lincoln forgives her for her part in disowning him...okay so far. But then Lynn ODs on pills.....what?

Okay, so Lynn killing herself over losing the ballgame, and then being forced under foster care. I don't mean to be that guy, but....I am honestly disgusted by this turn of events. Lynn killed herself for little rhyme nor reason, simply because she wanted to spite Lincoln. I mean, way to make Lynn more dislikable, writer! Seriously, while I don't like Lynn that much, not even I would want her to off herself. Especially when she had no reason to do so. And then when her sisters find her body....I didn't feel any sense of there being sadness or despair. Because literally the next thing that happens in this story is that Lori is made a legal adult and kicked out by the caretaker. Sorry, girls, I know that you're sad and all about your sister killing herself, but....Lori, since you're all grown up now, get the (bleep) out. If this happened later in the story, there wouldn't be much issue as it would build up to that. But to have Lori get kicked out without even having a chance to mourn for Lynn is disgusting. Really, every scene happens too quickly for me to really get a grasp of the story. And then Lori threatens Lincoln's life the moment she saw him again. Just....what....the Engineer was right; the characters are way too OOC. Really, none of these characters are willing to admit that they were at fault for what happened to them. Lynn refuses to admit that it was partially her fault for what happened, and kills herself hating Lincoln. Lori tries to attack Lincoln.....just, really. This story is bad.