User blog comment:CircularBoat742/Fanfiction - A Near Death Experience/@comment-26302585-20170306220223

This was good. However, I do have some nitpicks. First off, why didn't the sisters get grounded for, you know, almost killing their brother? Did Lynn Sr. and Rita really let the girls off that easy? Maybe it did happen off-screen, but I would've liked to have seen it happen. Secondly, how were the sisters calm about this at first. I get that their thankful he'll live, but the doctor said "…he probably would've died." How did that not get to them? It makes no sense. Thirdly, why didn't Lucy tell the other sisters and Lynn Sr. that she clogged the toilet before? Maybe this could teach them not to blame Lincoln anymore and actually find proof he did something before blaming him. Also, who or what clogged this time? We never find out. I think if we found out how the toilet ''really got clogged, this could, again, teach then not to blame Lincoln without proof anymore.

But these are just my gripes with the story. It's still good, I stll enjoyed it.