User blog comment:Weavillain/Fanfiction Spotlight: Worst Sister Ever?/@comment-32202721-20170818201340

Huh. So the author of "Every TLH Fanfiction Ever" tries to put forward a serious effort.

For the most part, I'm pretty impressed. I really liked the dialogue she wrote for Lori and Leni - particularly Leni - for the reasons you mentioned. I'm also intrigued by the dilemma the story poses for Lori. She wants her siblings (particularly Lincoln) to love and respect her, but she also wants to have the authority to maintain order in the household. And in her mind, she can't have the former without sacrificing the latter - hence her refusal to open up to Lincoln - so she has to choose.

On the negative side, I see a few formatting/punctuation errors that recur throughout the piece. Periods are often used where there should be commas, and vice-versa, and TakeBackTheFalls sometimes forgets to start a new paragraph when there's a new speaker.

I'm excited for this new series of yours, though! I happen to have a request in mind, which I'll leave on your wall.