Thread:AndrewBrauer/@comment-26302585-20170607073828/@comment-26302585-20170607145512

Okay then. While I thought it was decent, there were two things about it that didn't make sense to me.

1. The killer's motive. So, he planned to kill each of the Loud children as a way of closure for the death of his family? How could killing innocent children possibly help him move on? To me it just seems ridiculous and insane and five of the sisters died because of it. It doesn't make sense to me.

2. Leni shooting herself. Why did she shoot herself? Okay, I know why, so the killer would feel like he would have any reason to live, ruin his plan and save her siblings. But what if it didn't go that way? What if instead, he became frustrated, that he decided to take it out on the remaining Loud kids and kill them anyway? That's what his original plan was. By shooting herself, she could've doomed her remaining siblings. Also, she had the gun. Why didn't she shoot the killer instead? It would've made more sense, considering, you know, he murdered five of her sisters, not to mention tried to violate her, but no, she shoots herself. Why? If not kill him, she could at least shot him in his limbs and immobilize him.

But, these are my only two major criticisms. Other than that, everything else about the story was pretty well done. It was pretty dark, but it's a decent dark story.