User blog comment:YoshiRocker13/Fanfiction - Rocked and Rolled/@comment-32807753-20180502192047

I do think it is kind of OOC for Lincoln to be scared of a spider, especially since his class owns one. I also think he was kind of being a bit selfish by getting all sad that Luna wants to hang out with her new friends. I understand that he wants to spend time with Luna, and yeah, I'd be a bit dissappointed too, but I wouldn't get mad at her and think "she likes her new friends more than me She doesn't care about me." It's not like Luna can just dedicate her life to Lincoln 24/7. She has her own life and activities too. Plus, doesn't he have like 9 other sisters who I'm sure would be willing to spend time with him too.

Other than those two minor nitpicks, I think this was an otherwise great fanfiction. The ending where Luna stands up for Lincoln and realizes the monster he is was well-executed, and it shows a great bond between the two. While I have been a bit iffy about sister-favoritism from Lincoln from the past, I didn't really get the feeling that Luna was Lincoln's only favorite here. He just wanted to bond with Luna, which is beautiful. Jasper's comeuppance was satsfying too. I know you won't read this anytime in the future, but solid piece of work.