User blog comment:Lucasthewikiguy13/FanFiction - Naked Lincoln 2: Return of the Nudity/@comment-26302585-20170907225815/@comment-26302585-20170907233604

Well...I don't know what to think of this. I didn't think much of the previous one, and I'm not sure what to think of this one. Not bad, not good, just...eh. I do want to ask, and this is just out of curiosity, what made want to do another where Lincoln ends up naked?

You need to give details when writing a story. How does slipping cause him to accidentally pull them apart. If he's holding on to them bunched up, they won't rip. If he was holding them Like he would hold fabric with his arms spread, maybe they could rip. You said he was holding the colthes, but you didn't say how he was holding them. But I don't think he would be holding them like how you 'hold a pecie of string' as you put it. What would've made more sense is if the clothes were caught on something like a hook or a closed door or window, then when Lincoln tries to pull them, they rip. I still don't know what you mean about the underwear. Are you saying he did a split while in the air causing his underwear to rip in half? When has an accidental slip ever caused someone to split while in the air? Even then, I don't think the split would cause his underwear to rip in half. I think the worst it could is just the rip the backside (like Luna with her pants in Making the Case). Like the shirt and pants, maybe it could've been caught on something as he fell. It would make more sense then him somehow doing a split in air and they just rip in half.