Thread:Harvey Beaks Number 1 Fan/@comment-30953185-20180324180927/@comment-30953185-20180401023920

Lori: Alright, I called our family meeting to order. So all of us have literally meet our alternative selves, right?

"Call" not "Called"

Lincoln: At least yours is not a total thick-skinned crybaby who hates his sisters. You know how I can handle the teasing. Not to mention that he has actually ran away from home before.

"thin-skinned" not "thick skinned"

Lincoln: I know! I would. NEver run away from you!

Get rid of the period and uncapitalize "N" and "E"

Lori: Well, I guess mine was okay. Apart the Bobby knowing everything I do... or... she does... Or the fact that the cops were never called when Lincoln runs away... Or the not caring of her sisters.

Put a "from" in between "Apart" and "the"

Luna: And mine is just so... I don’t even know what to say. She doesn’t really do much to do with rock, and said she isn’t actually... Lincoln’s guardian? I do care for all of you, but I’m not anyone’s guardian.

Put "rock stuff" instead of "to do with rock", and put "she's" instead of "she isn't"

Lisa: At least yours has actual feelings unlike mine who has no sense in morality whatsoever.

"of", not "no"

Lana: I don’t know what the deal of my counterparts is. She was okay, but it’s like she never had a good memory of Lola.

"with instead of "of"

Lola: And it’s like mine never had a good memory of Lana. Seriously, mine was just... psychotic! She says she couldn’t kill one of Lana’s pets. Ndola I bet she tattles more than I have ever tattled!

"could" not "couldn't", also replace "Ndola" with "And"

Lynn: And mine is so brutally! She ends up going to rough on her siblings, which causes them harm, and doesn’t seem to care and think they should... toughen up! I don’t mind anyone toughening up, but she is taking it to a whole new level!

"brutal" not "brutally". Also change "She ends up going to rough on her siblings" to, "gets too rough with her siblings", and change "think" to "thinks".

Luan: Kinda sounds like mine who takes the pranks I do on April Fools Day, And does them everyday which hurts her siblings!

Uncapitalize "And"

Lana: At least Mom An Day dad’s alternative selves are there right?

"and" not "An Day"

Rita: Oh, they are there already. Only when someone needs discipline.

Change it to "Oh, they're there alright, only when someone needs discipline."

Lana: From a whiny crybaby who hates his sisters to a “guardian” who always kisses up to Lincoln to a complete bully who doesn’t care are if one gets hurt. This family is... what’s the word...

Change "are if one" to "if anyone gets hurt"

Lola: There’s one thing we can do. An escape.

Get rid of the "An"

(The sisters all agree to escape)

Change "sisters" to "siblings"

Rita: We Kinda stopped doing that because no one wanted to stay at the grown-up table. An day the table in the dining room had plenty of space.

"And" not "An day"

Leni: (Whispers) You know. You’re plan to escape.

Get rid of the apostrophe and the "e" in "You're"

Lincoln: Wait, where I should the portal?

"is" instead of "I should"

Lisa: Huh? Oh, right. When we entered the hiss dimension, I turned it off. Hold on, I can turn it on again. It will just take a few minutes.

"this" instead of "the hiss"

Lisa: And... Done! (Portal open) Okay, now we can leave. (The family enter s the portal, which leads them back to their own universe)

No space between "enter" and "s"