User blog comment:AndrewBrauer/Re-Written Episode: Making the Case/@comment-31789809-20170718142925/@comment-31789809-20170718205328

@MrTyeDye Oohh boy... oooohhhhh boy..... I know I'm probably going to get a LOT of backlash for this but... Inadequate was painful to read for me. Like, actually PAINFUL to my physical being as well as leaving an empty void of depression within my conscience. First of all, I thought that this depression that Lincoln felt came out of absolutely nowhere for the purpose of the story. I'm sorry but I never really believed that Lincoln felt sad at the end of the episode and the whole premise just seemed too forced with little to no buildup for me to feel connected. Second, every time this sub conscience of his kept talking him down by making him feel like trash felt like a straight kick to my gut and a hammer into my skull with how blatant and inculcating his feelings of worthlessness are. Also, it's just unreasonable that the sisters seem completely oblivious to what's going on. I mean, do you really expect me to believe that they would just accept that Lincoln is just having a bad day after he blew up at her own little sister and pushed her to the ground? That right there is grade-A idiocy right there. Lastly, the suicide attempts, especially the second one, are really forced in my eyes. The way he just gives up on everything after one little blow up from Lori is frankly very contrived in its delivery and that just bugs me in the wrong way. And worst of all, I hardly saw anything that warranted the second suicide attempt. Really, I just didn't. I mean, yeah, there the feeling that the hugs felt empty to him during the first attempt, but I find it unreasonable that he barely listened to anything his family said and just went ahead to kill himself a second time. And then the ending, to me, was very lazy. If all of those other hugs in the past meant nothing to him, what exactly was so different about the final one. I feel like it was made that way to make a deus ex machina happy ending. But above all of this, I feel like this story ignores everything that the original episodes of the Loud House stood for. While I understand that this is a darkfic and it isn't going to be all happy-go-lucky like the show, I feel that it crosses certain lines when it takes certain aspects of Making the Case and manipulating them into something angsty and dark that was never even intended from the writers of the episode. ......*sigh* So for those reasons, I find Inadequate just a story that represents everything wrong with making Lincoln into some depressed black sheep in how it keeps how hammering its messages in ironically making them far less memorable to me. But all of this is what I see from it, and I understand if you think I'm completely wrong in my reasoning. This is just my mindset in this story.