User blog:Lucasthewikiguy13/Lucas's FanFiction Reviews 7: No Such Love (Parts 1 and 2)

Welcome back everyone! Less than a month since the last review. And my oh my how good that one did. Anyway let's review a fanfiction series by MuppetSpot along with some exciting news at the end so stay tuned!

Part 1: Storyline

Our story begins with Lincoln being left behing by his family cause he is bad luck. Well this is a No Such Luck Continuation fanfic so considering the fact this is an alright start. Lincoln, due to him being disowned by his family, decides to go stay at Clyde's house for a while. Clyde agrees and Lincoln goes over there but after a few obstacles. Now I won't go into detail about these obstacles but one I must mention is Lincoln getting red paint on his clothes and him having to change and throwing those clothes in the ground. You'll see why I mention this is a bit.

Lincoln goes to Clyde's hous and tells him why he has to stay there and Clyde understands. Awwwwwww, that's nice Clyde! Your a good friend. Anyway Lincoln settles in and imagines his family having the luckiest day without him.

However that's not the case as karma, who I have to mention is mad as (BLEEP) to the Louds, deicdes to mess with them. Lynn loses he baseball game badly, Rita left the keys inside the van causing Lana to break the window with a rock just to get them out, they forget to bring Luna with them in the van before leaving....

Wait they forgot Luna! Well dang Louds Karma is now double mad as (BLEEP) to you. And boy does karma show it.

Lily started to puke and got it over Lori's phone and Lucy's poetry book causing Lori to throw up in Lucy's poetry book too which ruins it, Lori drops her phone getting her made, this causing her to kick Lynn Sr's seat causing him to run a red light, which then gets them pulled over by the police.

Lynn Sr's license is then discovered to be expired causing the car to be taken away having them walk home, Lola realizes she left her tiara in the van making her angry, Leni tripped and her sunglasses fell into a open manhole, and when they get home the cops are there who were called by one of the neighbors, "Probably Mr. Grouse," who said they left Lincoln outside and that they found Lincoln's clothes with the red paint on them, but they think its blood causing them to arrest Lynn Sr and Rita for child-neglect and possible murder which now puts the girls in foster care.

Well except for Luna since she wasn't there so she crashes at Tabby's a bit. Later Lincolna and Luna meet and they apologize. and Lincoln goes home, "which is Clyde's still," and goes to sleep wondering what will happen next.

That's the end of Part 1 though. Part 2 gets more interesting.

Part 2 begins with Lynn killing herself, "Because she is mad at Lincoln fo screwing their family life." Also before we continue please not that the other sister's think Lincoln is dead due to Lincoln's red-painted clothes.

The next day they find Lynn's dead body and weep before Lori is kicked out due to her being an adult now. Well Lori's life is screwed now since she's not done with High School yet.

Meanwhile Luna moves in with Lincoln and the McBrides because the McBrides have a heart. Meanwhile the two fathers go to a police interrogation room and meet with Pop-Pop or Albert. Albert wants them to adopt Luna and Lincoln due to their parents being arrested, and explains he can't take care of them due to him being too old. Because of this the two McBride fathers adopt Luna and Lincoln. (Which is weird since they never adopted the other siblings.) Also Clyde is now their brother meanign there is more then one brother, just a nice little thought.

Sometime later Luna and Lincoln are walking when suddenly Lori comes and tries to kill Lincoln. This is sense Lori always thought it was Lincoln's fault and now knows that he is alive. Also Lori is homeless and a hobo. But Luna na dLincoln calll the cops and they take Lori away.

The rest of this fanfic is Luna and Lincoln hanging and it's cool to see them do that.

'''[Well to be honest the plot is good with twists and turns here and there. Because of this I will give this storyline an 8.5 out of 10, because I feel like it deserves it.]'''

Part 2: Characters

The characters are good. Though some people think Lynn went overboard with her commiting suicide but it makes sense if you think about it sense Lynn's judgement got the better of her. Also I do wonder a little nitpick of why Albert didn't say about the other siblings.

'''[Alright characters! Another 8.5 out of 10]'''

Part 3: Style

The style is also good. It tells what happens with each character except for Lynn Sr and Rita. The others get some screentime which I think is alright.

'''[8.5 out of 10. TO be honest this story is kinda like an 8.5 at this point.]'''

Part 4: Does the story have anything missing

Well yeah this story does have a few. I'd like some insight with Lynn Sr and Rita and how long they will be in Prison. Also maybe Albert explaining why they shouldn't adopt the others. Maybe see how Lori's life changed since she probably got kicked out of school. And a few othe nitpicks.

'''[Well this final category has a 7 out of 10. Which is weird since the last 3 had 8.5 out of 10 but you get what you get.''']

Part 5: Final Rating

'''[Well our final rating is a 32.5/40 or a B, "Though really close to a B-." But I still reccomend this story. Especially since it has more parts coming. However I can't review those parts because...well remember that exciting news I said that would come at the end. Well that news is that I have became a Co-Writer starting Part 3! So the fanfic is now a MuppetSpot and Lucasthewikiguy13 Production starting Part 3. And I can't review myself since that is cheating.]'''

'''Another review done and over with. And my oh my I got some writing to do for this story. So stay tune for more parts of this fanfic coming soon. Comment below on what FanFiction I should do next and give your thoughts on this fanfiction as well. And I will see you next time here on Lucas's FanFiction Reviews!'''